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Tuesday 25 October 2016

The Magical Tree (Writing Practice)


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On Thursday we did a practise for our writing test in our paragraphs we had to have three different sentence types simple, compound and a complex sentences. Blue is simple, orange is compound and complex is pink.

Centuries ago there lived a young man named Peteli who lived in cargo village and it wasn’t that big. One day Peteli was walking to school and found a little apple lying on the floor from the apple tree but this apple was no ordinary apple it was glowing. Peteli was starving he hadn’t eaten in days taking his first bite his mouth was almost filled with apple juice eating the whole apple in five seconds and praying to god afterwards. All of a sudden the ground started shaking it was an earthquake Peteli wasn’t sure what to do he was paralysed, suddenly a massive crack opens up and swallowed everyone in cargo village no one but Peteli survived. The crack then disappeared and no one knew what had happened to caro village or that it even existed.

200 years after Peteli had awoken from his deep sleep and he still couldn’t believe what happened years ago. Peteli didn’t know what to do until one day a mysterious white bearded man named Dumbledore walked to Peteli and said “I know what happened centuries ago to your village and I am truly sorry.” Twigs started coming out of Peteli's eyes Dumbledore then said, “You have one wish Peteli.” Peteli was in shock, “The only people that know my name are my parent’s.” Peteli then said, “I wish that i could wish other people wishes that really need help.” All of a sudden Dumbledore hit the ground with his magical staff. “Your wish has been granted” and Dumbledore disappeared.

Peteli then wished if he could have a village named cargo village so they could keep him company if he was lonely. This was going to take a while because it wasn’t a small wish. So Peteli fell asleep and the next morning there were these kids climbing on him he was filled with joy. He laughed with happily the kids got scared and ran away calling for there mummy.


Centuries ago there lived a young man named Peteli who lived in cargo village and it wasn’t that big. One day Peteli was walking to school and found a little apple lying on the floor from the apple tree but this apple was no ordinary apple it was glowing. Peteli was starving he hadn’t eaten in days taking his first bite his mouth was almost filled with apple juice eating the whole apple in five seconds and praying to god afterwards. All of a sudden the ground started shaking it was an earthquake Peteli wasn’t sure what to do he was paralysed, suddenly a massive crack opens up and swallowed everyone in cargo village no one but Peteli survived. The crack then disappeared and no one knew what had happened to caro village or that it even existed.

200 years after Peteli had awoken from his deep sleep and he still couldn’t believe what happened years ago. Peteli didn’t know what to do until one day a mysterious white bearded man named Dumbledore walked to Peteli and said “I know what happened centuries ago to your village and I am truly sorry.” Twigs started coming out of Peteli's eyes Dumbledore then said, “You have one wish Peteli.” Peteli was in shock, “The only people that know my name are my parent’s.” Peteli then said, “I wish that i could wish other people wishes that really need help.” All of a sudden Dumbledore hit the ground with his magical staff. “Your wish has been granted.” Dumbledore disappeared.

Peteli then wished if he could have a village named cargo village so they could keep him company if he was lonely. This was going to take a while because it wasn’t a small wish. So Peteli fell asleep and the next morning there were these kids climbing on him he was filled with joy. He laughed with joy the kids got scared and ran away calling for there mummy.